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January 20, 2009

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Tanmay Vora

Hi Lynn - Wonderful statistics and observations. Obama's inaugural speech was one of the best I have heard off late and here are some of my observations:

1) Communcation is all about packing a lot of meaning into a few words. Speech was not too long, but it was very meaningful. I think same applies to writing as well.

2) He was able to paint pictures with his words and delivery style. People were hooked when he spoke because he added feelings into each and every spoken word.

3) From a management standpoint, his speech was a progressive one. One of the statistics could be how many progressive and positive words he used in his speech. People easily relate with whatever is progressive and hopeful.

4) As you rightly pointed out, he did not use any junk into his speech. He was speaking with utmost clarity (of thought and words) which created the impact. No junk and no interruptions made it even better.

All in all, a great speech.

Ali

This is a great analysis.

Point #4, seems more acceptable in verbal communications than written communications. It sounds better verbally than it reads or looks in writing.

Lynn

Tanmay and Ali, thanks for adding your comments.

Tanmay, it would be interesting to compare Mr. Obama's use of positive and negative words. To communicate a sense of urgency, I believe it was necessary to show both sides.

Ali, I frequently begin written sentences with conjunctions such as "but" and "and." My purpose is to avoid long, stringy sentences and to communicate energetically.

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