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November 08, 2006


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I love that we do this--I have a quote on my desk that reminds me--"Focus on what you want, not what you don't want." The theory is that the universe hears any negative statement the same as a positive and will reinforce whatever the subject of your thought is so we should focus on the positive. Your idea of exception must work the same way ;)-the mind looks for the positive, not the negative. Thanks for the reminder--I've had the same thing happen and have just thought people weren't paying attention. Maybe it was me not being clear enough....

Jennifer Irving

I love that quote Mary.

I think it's more that people just don't pay attention...they skim. So when they see Tuesday morning in the message, they think you're suggesting to meet Tuesday morning.

Attention to detail has gone downhill in the days of email overload.


While I agree it is incumbent on us to write clearly, surely it is also incumbent on the reader to read the entire message properly.

Skimming is fine for large documents when all you want is the 'flavour' of the message, but not when it comes to single sentence emails.

By stating the exception, you were being succinct - something I would personally value in these days of "email overload".

Is it really too much to ask that people actually read what we write?


Chris, it's frustrating, isn't it? Yet I continue to find evidence that people do not read email carefully. As a consultant-teacher who serves clients, I am not in a position to hold them accountable. Therefore, I do whatever it takes to communicate successfully.

Like you, I thought stating the exception was being succinct, but since it does not seem to work, I will use the wordier, clearer alternative.

Whether our documents are short or long, our readers are skimming--or reading very quickly. The challenge for us as writers is to adapt to their style of accessing information.

Roy Jacobsen

When we were teaching our oldest daughter Tish to ride bike, we learned quickly that we needed to remind her to focus on where she wanted to go, and not on what she wanted to avoid. When she was in a wide open area, she was fine, but when she was near obstacles, Tish had an unfortunate tendency to focus her attention on the obstacles (and I'm sure many other kids have it as well). And when you focus on it, you tend to head towards it, whether you want to or not.

I've seen this tendency born out so often in life, that I've tried to make it a personal writing rule to focus my message on what I want people to do, not on what I want them to avoid. I've done a lot of technical writing in my career, and it seems like a lot of what I've seen is written in "Don't do this, Don't do that" phrases, rather than "Be sure you do this, and do that."

Roy Jacobsen

[ahem] Make that "I've seen this tendency _borne_ out so often..."

(I know, minor details...)


Roy, thanks for the very apt story--and for changing "born" to "borne." Both posts made me smile.

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