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September 07, 2010


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My advice is to display confidence.

Those who are unemployed can feel drained. But if they communicate that they are weighed down by their unemployed status, others will not be enthusiastic about employing them or even helping them out.

On the other hand, those who are optimistic about the future often display a passion that is contagious and that others want to see more of in their own environment. It is easy to welcome such people.

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Hi, Alfredo. Thank you for your wise advice. Optimism and passion are excellent attributes to exhibit in a job search.



Objective ..but not totally detatched!

I totally agree with Alfredo,the potential employer should never detect your "bad need" for a job, nor should you share your despair for an income with him.Market your strength with elegance...not arrogance of course, or you will illiminate your chances.
However a tiny human touch in your writing(maybe a word, maybe just being your real self for a second) , can work wonders and give strength to your business letter.


It doesnt matter whether or not you are unemployed. I believe being professional in instances as these find the strength to do so. The "being drained because of unemployment" excuse is of no consequence.

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Hi, Haifa. I like your advice to "market your strength with elegance." Thanks for that lovely string of words.

Nisha, I do think unemployment can be very draining. Sometimes people's despair about their situation is hard to keep hidden. But your advice to be professional makes sense.



Sometimes, job seekers tend to overstate their expertize or experience with some additional skills, rewards or accomplishments. All of these can be easily checked, especially when you start to work with a person. Most of the applicants could still be hired without those unnecessary embellishments, but once they are revealed, employer's trust for such person is seriously damaged.

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Tina, thank you for the important cautioning advice.



I have to disagree with the formal letter close Lynn.

Whilst I agree "unemployed neighbour" is not a good close, it is not because I think it has a lack of formality, rather it is wrong because of the negative mindset.

I have employed hundreds of people over the years, and got bombarded by CVs every time I advertised. The heap of paper was always swelled by unwanted paper from those annoying and very unwelcome recruitment consultants, so as a result the unusual helped to differentiate to get me to look harder at one applicant in a very big pile.

What caught my eye amongst the letters were people who displayed enthusiasm, passion and humanity.

I think "Best Regards" is either too formal or, worse still , too familiar for my liking.

On the other hand the close "Enthusiastic neighbour looking forward to meeting

Jane Doe" might work for me.

I would urge all applicants to try to stand out, for example using the classic direct marketing tricks like using light pastel shade unusual sized envelopes and paper in order to catch the readers eye.

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Mike, thank you for your excellent suggestion. I agree that "Enthusiastic neighbour (neighbor) looking forward . . ." would get positive attention.

Your advice makes perfect sense.


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