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July 23, 2011


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Hi Lynn,

Very informative and usefull to us.I like this below sentence very much in this content.

"I hope you do not need to use them."


Hi Lynn,

I am a regular reader of your Blog and thanks a bunch for sharing a very informative information.

I am looking to your valuable suggestions, to know which of the below line is correct? Why? I need to print this line in my wedding invitation card.

1) And the celebration of a happy beginning will be more complete when you share with us this special day

2) And the celebration of a happy beginning will be more complete when you share with us ON this special day

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Hi, Imran. Thanks for your positive words.

Hi, Sarvana. You do not need the preposition "on" in your invitation.



Anna Haroun

Hi Lynn

Thanks for sharing, very informative.


Hello Lynn

I have just stumbled across your blog, and am finding your tips very helpsful. However, your condolence notes threw me a little and I hope you don't mind discussing why and offering an alternative view. As someone who has recently lost someone, I found that notes similar to your examples were some of the more upsetting ones. The more comforting notes focused less on the tragedy/sadness/horror and much more on the departed's courage/happy memories/ compliments on their character. The recipient of a note like this doesn't need recent events politley regurgitated to them - they need comfort, reassurance and strong, happy memories of the one(s) they have lost. Being in someone's thoughts is comforting, but reading their personal and heartfelt response to your loss (should they feel they need to express that) is even more touching.

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Dear Anonymous,

Your point makes excellent sense. I agree with you, and I appreciate your raising the idea, especially since it came out of your own painful experience. Thank you for sharing.

In my examples, I did not focus on the deceased person's courage or character because I wrote them as though I did not know the deceased person. That is often the case when business associates send condolences.

You may want to read some of my other examples under the category "Writing Condolences" (at right). Some of them include remembrances of the departed person.

Again, thank you for sharing your insights.


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