Cuba is complicated. That's what our guides told us when we asked questions about how things work in the country: Es complicado. Salaries, food, ownership, restoration, politics, global relationships–Todo es complicado.
But writing about Cuba should not be complicated. Writers should strive to communicate complex topics as clearly and simply as possible.
Are you up for a challenge? Below is a 102-word complicated sentence excerpted from a book about Cuba. How would you simplify it? How many sentences would you break it into? Feel free to change wording where it will simplify the message.
Yet even if there was no love lost between the man and the Cuban government, because Payá articulated some criticisms of the regime that were shared within respected state institutions, and because he did so without appearing to be as much a tool or creation of outside actors as other dissident initiatives, the decision by the regime to allow the Varela Project to survive, even in a very low-key way, may have foreshadowed, if only by a matter of timing, the public’s eagerness for and the government’s capacity to manage a wider public debate about the revolution’s future without risking counterrevolutionary upheaval.
I look forward to reading your revised paragraph.
You can get more practice revising long sentences–including your own–in Business Writing Tune-Up.
Note: My husband and I spent two wonderful weeks in Cuba on a Road Scholar tour. I highly recommend it if you are interested in Cuba and can invest the time and money. (Ismar, thank you for your generous companionship. Rena, thank you for the paragraph.)