A Passive Verb to Change

I was reviewing an email today for our Email Intelligence online class, when I came across a good example of a passive verb to change. Here is the context: 

The writer, whom I will call Kelly, is emailing managers to ask them to find volunteers for a project. She instructs the managers:

  • Find out who would like to volunteer.
  • Respond to me by Thursday, April 22, with the names of the volunteers.
  • If no one volunteers, someone will need to be appointed.

Do you recognize where the passive verb sneaked in?

In the third bullet point, Kelly has not stated who will appoint someone. Should the managers appoint someone? Probably. But Kelly has not asked the managers to do so. She has only said that it needs to be done.

Here's how Kelly can revise that step:

  • If no one volunteers, please appoint someone. 

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  1. But how will they know if no-one is appointed?

    Her second point asks them to reply to Kelly only, so none of the managers would know if they should appoint someone or not.

    I think this is perhaps less clear than the original.

  2. Hi Lynn, I stopped by again – thanks for the reply.

    The ambiguity I was referring to was actually in the explanation – it wasn’t clear in your set-up that managers would be emailed individually. The phrase ‘She instructs the managers’ suggests the contrary. In that case, the re-write itself is perfectly fine – ignore me!

    (Also, please do correct me if re-write shouldn’t be hyphenated – I’m sure you have quite firm (and correct) views on the matter!)

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