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August 23, 2019

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Peter Schreiner

I like the period. It emphasizes the point, liberated. Also, I would omit the word really. It adds nothing.

Lynn Gaertner-Johnston

Hi Peter. I thought about the word "really" too--typically a throwaway. But in Amy's emotional context--ready vs. really ready--I think it may add something.

Thanks for commenting.

Lynn

Deborah

I'd have used a simple comma, which you didn't even consider. I'm afraid I've lost touch with the semicolon, as in "I don't really know when to use it". In this case, after your explanation, I think I'd go for the semicolon.

I don't think "you'll feel liberated" gives enough clarification to answer the question "why", so I wouldn't pick the colon. I feel that the period would also be a good choice.

I'm not familiar with the dash, I don't think we use it much in my language (at least no one taught me anything about it in school). Would that have been appropriate in this context? Was the article informal enough?

Lynn Gaertner-Johnston

Hi Deborah,

Thanks for thinking about the question! You are quite thorough.

In fiction--in which the author has creative license--the comma would have been acceptable. But in business writing there's no rule that supports it. It leads to a run-on sentence--that is, two sentences run together.

The dash would be a good choice. It has energy, which the reader needs in that sentence.

Learn about dashes here:
https://www.businesswritingblog.com/business_writing/2015/09/understanding-dashes-and-hyphens-.html

Learn more about semicolons here:
https://www.businesswritingblog.com/business_writing/2006/02/in_defense_of_s.html


Lynn

Mark

I was originally thinking the period or semicolon was the way to go, but I'm now thinking I would use an ellipsis. It provides a nice pause without the harshness of a period or colon, or even a semicolon.
When you're really ready to stop, you won't feel terrible...you'll feel liberated.
What do you think?

Lynn Gaertner-Johnston

Hi Mark,

The ellipsis has become very popular. At the same time, none of the prominent style manuals (last time I checked) recommend using it that way for business writing. So I don't normally recommend it.

That said, I agree with you about the nice pause without harshness.

Here's another post I wrote with information about ellipses:
https://www.businesswritingblog.com/business_writing/2009/06/i-am-ready-to-face-ellipses.html

Thanks for the question.

Lynn

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